I keep guiding my students about writing TAT stories. Often students write stories which are mere descriptions of the scene and are not much meaningful. In this blog I have given the stories written by a student and shown as to how these can be improved.

Story by Student

Sanjay, an si of delhi police station came to know about a miscreant.

From last week , he has been searching about the miscreant. He has searched in the nearby town along with his town. He shared the information to the nearby police station. One day while investigating he got information that he is hiding as an imposter. He reached there, hid behind the tree while he was roaming . He caught him and him to the station.

Improved Story

Sanjay was a private detective. He had been hired by a client to help in the recovery of his stolen precious ornaments. Sanjay, along with his colleague was very diligent in his work and unobtrusively observed the activities of the major suspect. Through regular surveillance he was able to confirm the culprit as well the location where the stolen ornaments had been hidden. He was able to get the thief arrested and aided the recovery of the stolen ornaments.

Explanation

SI of Police is unlikely to be wearing the dress shown & would be in uniform. Other parts of the story were okay. Changes have been made to improve realism.

Story of student

Shubham , a college student decided to plan a vacation along with his friend. So he along with his friend reached to a conclusion to go into the mountains. He booked the train tickets. While journey he saw serene nature and rivers. He meet people from different states . He shared his thoughts and enjoyed the journey. After sometime he reached the destination.

Improved Story

Shubham was motivated to join the Defence Forces as an officer. He worked hard to achieve his aim. He had seen some of his seniors joining the NDA and knew that to do so he had to have good academic ability as well as physical fitness. He was fond of sports and was a fairly good athlete. Thus, his sports pursuits had given him good physical fitness. He found out the syllabus of NDA written exam and along with his studies for twelfth, he prepared for it. His close friend was also interested to join NDA and they used to often study together. He was able to pass the written exam & thereafter the SSB and joined NDA to begin his journey towards becoming an officer. His parents were happy to see him off at the railway station to join NDA.

Explanation

The student’s story is little more than the description of the scene. A story should be more meaningful.

Student’s Story

Mohit a PhD student was assigned  a project on the electrical equations . As his performance and academic records were good, this task was assigned by his teacher . One day while solving the equations he was aroused by some doubts . He first search on the net to get some clue. After getting some idea  and got clarifications he discussed with his teachers and then submitted it to the teacher.

Improved Story

Mark was working on an important research project for designing an artillery gun for the UK Army. He had been a bright scientist, with keen interest in design and research. His project leader was a highly experienced man in the field. During the course of their work they had to use the board to solve problems in the old-fashioned manner apart from work on computers and simulators. Within an year they were able to produce a proto-type of a gun which was much lighter and more accurate than the previous gun in use. Mark was happy with his efforts.

Explanation

The name is changed to Mark, because apparently the persons shown are not Indians. The story had hardly any worthwhile achievement hence the plot has also been improved.

Student’s Story

Sanjana , a nurse while working in the night shift came to know about an emergency with the patient. So she start preparing for the emergency procedure . While the patient was in serious condition she gave some medicine and called the doctor . She was also accompanied by her fellowmate . She both took care of the patient while the doctor was on his way. She gave her medicines and meanwhile check the doctors . The doctor reached within the time and stabilize the patient.

Improved Story

It was Sanjana’s younger sister’s last birthday of school life. She was due to move out for college studies to a foreign country. Sanjana was very proud and happy for her sister. She had done very well in school and qualified for a prestigious college abroad. Sanjana had been her guide throughout her growing up days, be it academics, sports or fun. Sanjana had planned a get-together for her sister and her friends at home. There were a lot of things to be done. She was excited to organize a memorable occasion for her sister. The celebrations went off well and the sisters were very happy.

Explanation

The two girls shown seem to be in a hurry. The dresses and scene do not create the environment of a hospital hence the plot has been changed.

Student’s Story

Sarojini , a student want to spent some time with the her grandma. So she consulted with her parents . So she decided to go to village . When he reached there , she discussed the old time and about his childhood . Every night they watch movies . She helped her in the cooking . She enjoyed the good time with her grandma and make her days memorable.

Improved Story

Sara was quite close to her grandmother and loved spending time with her. Her grandmother was a very well-read and independent lady and had been a great influence in Sara’s life. Sara was due to leave her country to study abroad. Her decision was influenced by her grandmother. Her grandmother used to stay in village. Before leaving her country, Sara went to spend one week with her grandmother. During the week they discussed the past memories and enjoyed the things they liked doing together and most importantly Sara received invaluable tips about managing her life and future career, away from her parents.

Explanation

Name has been changed because shorter names take less time to write & time is important in life. The student’s story was not much meaningful hence greater meaning has been given to it.


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